A few weeks ago, I delivered a presentation that convinced our leadership team to adopt a new app designed to track time planned and spent on employee learning. The room was filled with executives and team leads, and by the end, they weren’t just nodding - they were excited to roll it out. The journey from a rough draft to a polished, story-driven pitch, enhanced by AI, made all the difference.
Here’s how I built it, from a rough draft to a story that resonated, with a little help from AI to make it shine.
Crafting the Draft: Messaging, Content, and Call to Action
I started with a clear goal: persuade the audience that our new app would boost employee development by making learning time transparent and actionable. The messaging centered on three points: learning drives growth, tracking time ensures accountability, and the app makes it simple. I relied on data that shows employees thrive when they have time for learning, managers feel more accountable when employees are clear on their demands, and the org achieves better customer satisfaction overall.
The initial draft was solid but uninspiring—mostly bullet points, lots of words, a few stats, and technical details about the app’s features. It needed a spark to connect with the audience.
Adding Storytelling: From Facts to Feelings
To elevate the presentation, I leaned into storytelling to create an emotional connection. I decided to open with a troubling question: "when was the last time you spent dedicated time for learning during your working hours". This set the stage for why the app mattered.I structured the presentation like a story: the problem (untracked learning time), the stakes (stagnation and missed growth), the solution (our app), and the vision (a culture of continuous learning).
Instead of leaning on tech jargon, I used visuals to show how the app looks like, and what kind of data we can extract from it.
The call to action became an invitation: “Let’s empower every employee to grow, starting with this pilot.”
Using AI to Elevate the Presentation
While the storytelling added heart, I knew the presentation could be sharper. That’s where AI came in, specifically tools like Copilot to refine my messaging. I fed it my draft script and asked, “How can I make this more focused on storytelling?”I was amazed to see how Copilot analyzed my slides, and identified both the strong points of my presentation, but also the areas where I should put more emphasize in order to touch the hearts of the audience.
I also practiced a lot the delivery - I could have used AI to listen to my presentation and identify areas where I was rushing, not pausing enough, or not using the right tone of voice.
For example, I practiced pausing after key points like, “This app doesn’t just track time - it builds careers,” to let the idea land. After a few tweaks, my delivery felt confident and natural.
The Big DayWhen presentation day arrived, I felt ready. The virtual room was packed - I opened with the question, and you could feel the room shift; people leaned in. As I moved through the slides, I saw a clear jump in the level of interest. By the time I ended the demo of the app, the energy was palpable.
The Q&A was lively, with executives asking about timelines and also pitching ideas for the pilot.
Reflection
This presentation worked because it blended a clear message, relatable storytelling, and AI-driven polish. The draft gave structure, the story added heart, and AI made it sharp. It’s a process I’ll use again: define the message, tell a story that resonates, and leverage AI to refine it. And yes, rehearse until words come naturally!
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